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Emerging in the depths of past collisions
is a high jump of a challenge not always worth taking,
but knowing a restless soul will not be sedated
with second-guessing, a deep breath is ignored
before taking a dive in a current that tugs down
instead of pushes up, builds pressure instead
of releasing tension, and though knowing
the consequences, does all this anyway.
Recalling yesterdays and passing glances
when tomorrow calls with a siren quality, beckoning,
direction is reversed and somehow today has been skipped,
and reliving moments I was never a part of,
searching for clues to a puzzle already solved,
but for some reason, hellbent that there is a piece missing.
I've been here before, but I can't remember when.
It's never just a stroll down the lane—but a marathon
in which there is no end, because the past is continually
being made, and if I think a second in the yesteryears, it's
the rest of my life I'm trying to catch up with, now. So
forgive me in my reflections, if I don't recall what was
just being said because I just got the joke from five seconds ago
and already you're talking about tomorrow--
can we just focus on the now for an hour so I can do
some catch up as I'm still lost in the undertow of a jump
I should have never done—but of course, did anyway.
is a high jump of a challenge not always worth taking,
but knowing a restless soul will not be sedated
with second-guessing, a deep breath is ignored
before taking a dive in a current that tugs down
instead of pushes up, builds pressure instead
of releasing tension, and though knowing
the consequences, does all this anyway.
Recalling yesterdays and passing glances
when tomorrow calls with a siren quality, beckoning,
direction is reversed and somehow today has been skipped,
and reliving moments I was never a part of,
searching for clues to a puzzle already solved,
but for some reason, hellbent that there is a piece missing.
I've been here before, but I can't remember when.
It's never just a stroll down the lane—but a marathon
in which there is no end, because the past is continually
being made, and if I think a second in the yesteryears, it's
the rest of my life I'm trying to catch up with, now. So
forgive me in my reflections, if I don't recall what was
just being said because I just got the joke from five seconds ago
and already you're talking about tomorrow--
can we just focus on the now for an hour so I can do
some catch up as I'm still lost in the undertow of a jump
I should have never done—but of course, did anyway.
Do you think it'd be possible to stop time? Just for a little bit, so maybe I could be in the "now" instead of in the "ten minutes ago" stage of my life.
Maybe then I could come up with witty comebacks more quickly when I was at work instead of ten minutes later.
And just maybe I could get caught up on all my messages on dA.
I will, someday. Promise.
Maybe then I could come up with witty comebacks more quickly when I was at work instead of ten minutes later.
And just maybe I could get caught up on all my messages on dA.
I will, someday. Promise.
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactThis piece has a nice flow to it and it is clear that a story is being told as well. The story is more of a stream of consciousness where the writer appears to be telling reader about wishing to have the ability to revisit decisions and go back to moments in time to be more prepared for them.
The language with the piece is good and you provide some nice vocabulary words as well. You also take the time to let this piece flow instead of being caught up in the idea of making verses rhyme, which works well for this piece.
Overall, a very nice job.